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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to bring it to FA status in time for YouTube's 20th anniversary. Unfortunately, due to my unforseen Wikibreak, I wasn't able to get as much advice as I wanted. I've listed this article for peer review because I want to bring it to FA status in time for YouTube's 20th anniversary. Unfortunately, due to my unforseen Wikibreak, I wasn't able to get as much advice as I wanted.


Thanks, ]<sup><small>TM</small></sup> <small>(])</small> 18:47, 19 June 2024 (UTC) Thanks, ]<sup><small>TM</small></sup> <small>(])</small> 18:47, 19 June 2024 (UTC)

==== Comments from ] ====
Hey ]! I'm Sam, aka {{user|The Sharpest Lives}}. I saw your message earlier today on SupremeLordBagel's talk page, nice to meet another young editor! Under this header, I will post any comments about the page. (''To other editors: feel free to make your own header, or make a "general comments" section, whatever works'')
* '''Main image''': I was wondering, could you use the thumbnail for the YouTube video as the main image? I'm sure it would be allowed as ], though the video itself may be disputed. I believe it would help readers identify the video (if they have seen it before). If you need help, I can help too! – <span style="font-family:Perpetua;">]</span> (]•]•]) 00:29, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
** That could work. ] uses the video's thumbnail as the main image, and it hasn't been deleted since then. ]<sup><small>TM</small></sup> <small>(])</small> 12:48, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
*** Thumbnail uploaded.
*'''Possible copyvio''': A copyright violations detector a possible copyvio. I'd just rephrase the highlighted (in red) sentences to where it doesn't directly copy the text. On a separate note, I have ] open for an album article, ]. Feel free to check it out! – <span style="font-family:Perpetua;">]</span> (]•]•]) 00:52, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
** The top result is a ] site that copied content from the Misplaced Pages article. I'll inspect other results. ]<sup><small>TM</small></sup> <small>(])</small> 12:51, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
**:The LinkedIn result is, too. ]<sup><small>TM</small></sup> <small>(])</small> 12:51, 20 June 2024 (UTC)

==== Comments from Arconning ====
Yello! Here are my comments on some grammar/prose mistakes or things that can be needed!
*Lead and infobox:
**From the previous comments from ], I believe the thumbnail would also serve for good use under a free use license. Though the image currently present on the article is up for deletion, so that should probably resolved soon if you're looking to nominate it for FA. You could also upload an image of Jawed Karim, the person present in the video, to serve as visual representation on who Karim is, as there's an image in Commons that's in the Public domain.
** Add a comma after {{!xt|YouTube's co-founder}}, so that it would be {{xt|YouTube's co-founder, Jawed Karim}}.
*** Added.
*Background:
**{{xt|Hurley studied design at the Indiana University of Pennsylvania, and Karim and Chen studied computer science at the University of Illinois Urbana-Champaign.}}, probably reword to "University of Pennsylvania, while Karim and Chen..."
*** Reworded.
*Reception:
** There's a mention of "Me at the zoo" without quotes right after the mention by the ''Los Angeles Times'', that would be changed. Also add a comma after "2009" in that sentence.
*** Added quotes, but didn't add comma (wouldn't really make sense)
**Add a comma after "Aaron Duplantier" and the title of his book.
*** Done.
*Legacy:
** In the last paragraph, I suggest putting the dates of the events within the sentence itself. Example: "The video's description was changed in November 2021..."
*** Done.
**Add a comma after "Greg Jarboe" and the title of his book.
*** Done.
*Notes:
**The bullet refers to ], though the subject of the article isn't present? Either omit or the article linked could be updated listing the video as a former "Most viewed video" as it was for a few moments, technically.
*** Omitted link. The video's view count (as of June 2024) is at 325 million views. It has never once been the most viewed video on YouTube. Also, I couldn't find a reliable source for when it was at its most popular point.
*References:
**In reference 20, don't use as it's not part of the original title.
*** Removed.
**For the sources utilizing books, you should probably use a "Bibliography" section in the "References" section. The first example I could think of is ], you could use it as a guide.
*** <s>Will look into it.</s> Done.
*Other:
**You could probably squeeze in the words he said in the video. Here's a reliable source that mentions the words he said in the video!
*** <s>Will consider using it.</s> Added.
*Overall, the article's prose is nice, just a few grammar mistakes here and there. For now, the article's a respectable GA but most of the sections would be extended with more paragraphs hopefully to encompass more information about the subject of the article.
Cheers and good luck! ] (]) 16:20, 22 June 2024 (UTC)

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to bring it to FA status in time for YouTube's 20th anniversary. Unfortunately, due to my unforseen Wikibreak, I wasn't able to get as much advice as I wanted.

Thanks, TWOrantula (enter the web) 18:47, 19 June 2024 (UTC)

Comments from The Sharpest Lives

Hey TrademarkedTWOrantula! I'm Sam, aka The Sharpest Lives (talk · contribs). I saw your message earlier today on SupremeLordBagel's talk page, nice to meet another young editor! Under this header, I will post any comments about the page. (To other editors: feel free to make your own header, or make a "general comments" section, whatever works)

Comments from Arconning

Yello! Here are my comments on some grammar/prose mistakes or things that can be needed!

  • Lead and infobox:
    • From the previous comments from The Sharpest Lives, I believe the thumbnail would also serve for good use under a free use license. Though the image currently present on the article is up for deletion, so that should probably resolved soon if you're looking to nominate it for FA. You could also upload an image of Jawed Karim, the person present in the video, to serve as visual representation on who Karim is, as there's an image in Commons that's in the Public domain.
    • Add a comma after YouTube's co-founder, so that it would be YouTube's co-founder, Jawed Karim.
      • Added.
  • Background:
    • Hurley studied design at the Indiana University of Pennsylvania, and Karim and Chen studied computer science at the University of Illinois Urbana-Champaign., probably reword to "University of Pennsylvania, while Karim and Chen..."
      • Reworded.
  • Reception:
    • There's a mention of "Me at the zoo" without quotes right after the mention by the Los Angeles Times, that would be changed. Also add a comma after "2009" in that sentence.
      • Added quotes, but didn't add comma (wouldn't really make sense)
    • Add a comma after "Aaron Duplantier" and the title of his book.
      • Done.
  • Legacy:
    • In the last paragraph, I suggest putting the dates of the events within the sentence itself. Example: "The video's description was changed in November 2021..."
      • Done.
    • Add a comma after "Greg Jarboe" and the title of his book.
      • Done.
  • Notes:
    • The bullet refers to List of most-viewed YouTube videos, though the subject of the article isn't present? Either omit or the article linked could be updated listing the video as a former "Most viewed video" as it was for a few moments, technically.
      • Omitted link. The video's view count (as of June 2024) is at 325 million views. It has never once been the most viewed video on YouTube. Also, I couldn't find a reliable source for when it was at its most popular point.
  • References:
    • In reference 20, don't use as it's not part of the original title.
      • Removed.
    • For the sources utilizing books, you should probably use a "Bibliography" section in the "References" section. The first example I could think of is Qalaherriaq#Bibliography, you could use it as a guide.
      • Will look into it. Done.
  • Other:
    • You could probably squeeze in the words he said in the video. Here's a reliable source that mentions the words he said in the video!
      • Will consider using it. Added.
  • Overall, the article's prose is nice, just a few grammar mistakes here and there. For now, the article's a respectable GA but most of the sections would be extended with more paragraphs hopefully to encompass more information about the subject of the article.

Cheers and good luck! Arconning (talk) 16:20, 22 June 2024 (UTC)

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