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Assessment
I am assessing this article for WikiProject Schools following a request. A nice article, seems to pass the B-class criteria fine. Getting articles to good article/featured article status is not my speciality though there are few suggestions I can give. Some of the article's punctuation needs to be checked, references should be after full stops and commas. Capital letters should normally only be used for proper nouns, and the first letter of section headings and sentences, see WP:MOSCAPS; capital letters seem to be used excessively in some areas e.g. most subject names should not be captialised. Bold is also sometimes overused, see WP:MOSBOLD. The image in the infobox should usually be the school logo, which can be uploaded under a claim of fair use. I have trouble following part of the lead, what a "shift" is needs to be made clearer. Avoid too much detail on one aspect in the lead it should only introduce and summarise the article per WP:LEAD. Some sections such as education are rather list like, per WP:WPSCH/AG#WNTI prose with context to the school is better. The referencing seems okay, though there are a few gaps such as not all alumni having a reference. Also I get the impression that more parameters could be filled in for some refs. I am giving this article Mid-importance for now based on alumni. Camaron · Christopher · talk 10:36, 29 September 2009 (UTC)
I was asked but have little to add to Chris's words. However the quality is high and reflects the effort that must have gone into this article. Do not lose heart when you receive criticism, this deserves to make GA Victuallers (talk) 17:20, 5 October 2009 (UTC)
I note the request for re-assessment. I am not sure what else to add beyond my earlier tips, and not all of them have yet been implemented, though as Victuallers said this is still a good quality article. A GA reviewer will be along shortly to give a review. This article is already at the highest rating, B-class, which can be given outside the GA nomination process. I can however review the importance rating and after a review I have decided there is enough for High-importance. The list of alumni is short, but important people are listed. The school has also had national recognition in areas like debating and academic achievement. Camaron · Christopher · talk 18:44, 8 October 2009 (UTC)
GA Review
- This review is transcluded from Talk:Dhaka Residential Model College/GA2. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Nasty Housecat (talk) 17:21, 7 March 2010 (UTC)
GA checklist
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it reasonably well written?
- A. Prose quality:
- Grammar and spellling are ok.
- B. MoS compliance:
- MOS compliance ok.
- A. Prose quality:
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. References to sources:
- Needs additional work on references.
- B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
- References are reliable, but need work on formatting.
- C. No original research:
- A. References to sources:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- Needs better coverage of school history.
- B. Focused:
- Too much detail on courses, competitons, and other subjects not of general interest.
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Reads a bit promotional. Could use more work on WP:NPOV
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- Stable. No edit wars.
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- OTRS pending tag should be replaced with OTRS approval before renominating.
- B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
- Images are appropriate and good quality. Captions could be improved. See WP:CAPTION
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Pass or Fail:
- Comments: I have noticed the poor quality of the image of DRMC Debate team. So I've removed that. Furthermore I've just used the photos only taken by me in the article except the logo (which can't be gained without a copyrighted one). -- Tanweer 07:38, 8 March 2010 (UTC)
- Response: DRMC_football_team.JPG is copyright of the school and attribution is not enough. The school will have to confirm permission to use it with an email. See WP:PERMISSION. Once the email is sent, you can use the {{OTRS pending}} tag while permission is confirmed by OTRS volunteers. This is the required procedure for any image you take from the website (or any other copyrighted source).
- The logo is fine, but you need to include a Fair Use Rationale for this article. See WP:LOGO. Use the {{Logo fur]}} template for best results. --Nasty Housecat (talk) 00:36, 9 March 2010 (UTC)
Summary Comments:I am sorry to say that the article still has a ways to go to meet the GA criteria. The prose is much improved thanks to good copyediting, but there are issues with the remaining criteria that will prevent promotion at this time. Please see my comments below and please take them constructively. I recognize the hard work you have put into this piece and encourage you to continue to improve it.
My suggestion would be to address all of the concerns noted here , submit the article to another peer review, and address all of the suggestions you receive there before re-nominating this for GA again. I believe that will help you improve the article substantially.
General:
- You have not fully addressed Brianboulton’s excellent peer review suggestions. It still reads like a lot like promotional material. For example, the exhaustive list of departments and subjects is of no interest to the general reader and the information on debate and quiz is overly detailed. The history of the school is very thin, although that would probably be of most interest to an encyclopedia reader.
- There is a lot of overlinking going on. Terms that most English speakers will understand should not be linked. Examples include: DRMC (don’t link the article to itself), medical examination, library, book, newspaper, magazine, laundry. There are may others. Also avoid linking the same term more than once.
- The referencing is spotty. Better referencing is need throughout the article. Examples here include: who says it is the largest campus in Dhaka? Why is Zainul Abedin “intellectual or reknowned”? There are many other such claims that need references.
- Some paragraphs have no reference at all. The rule of thumb is to reference all quotes, major claims, statistics, and at least one per paragraphs.
Lead:
- “By the then government of Pakistan.” Why “then”? Many readers will not understand the history of Bangladesh.
- The lead should summarize the article. The rule of thumb is that every section heading should be mentioned in some way. See WP:LEAD.
History:
- This section needs to be expanded quite a bit. Why did the school change hands? Why add another session? Why change things after independence?\
- Delete the board information. It is not of general interest.
- What does “intermediate level mean”? What is III to XII grades? These are not familiar to people from different educational systems.
Admissions:
- “Admission tests at the primary and lower secondary levels are competitive as well.” What does this mean?
- “Students of at the end of primary level gets the opportunity to appear for the primary scholarship examination. And the students at the end of lower secondary level can appear for the junior scholarship examination as well.” What does that mean? Needs some explanation.
Curriculum:
- Avoid using the “&.” Use the word “and”.
- The list of subjects and departments is not encyclopedic. All schools do these things. Tell us what makes the school interesting, unusual, special.
- The academic performance section needs a lot of explanation. Foreigners (Americans for sure) will have no idea what any of these things are.
Extracurricular Activities:
- There is way too much detail here, and again, non-native readers will not understand what many of these events are. Why are they important and interesting? Are they top finishes in national events? If not, why are they notable?
References:
- All references should have a publisher and, where available, a date. This is missing from many of the references.
External links:
- You should delete most of these except the official school website. See WP:EL.
Thanks for all your work on this article and please do not allow this to discourage you from continuing to contribute and renominate your work when it is ready. Best regards.
--Nasty Housecat (talk) 02:23, 10 March 2010 (UTC)
SMasters and Celestra, thank you.
SMaster, I see that you have been doing heavy-duty copywriting on this article.
Celestra, thank you for finding my error. I knew it had to be obscure, but I sure couldn't find it!
I had made a TINY start and was feeling overwhelmed; I put the article aside for a few days and the issue was solved for me!!! (I was also looking at MoS on lists, because one of his bits of feedback said that prose should be used rather than lists, so I was trying to resolve the list issue in the History section.)
I appreciate the work you've done on behalf of the author. (My daughter's boyfriend is Bengali, so I felt some connection.)
I'm going to toss my printed off copy and keep my mitts off this project! Bettymnz4 (talk) 23:25, 7 March 2010 (UTC)
- It was a pleasure to be able to help. :-) -- S Masters (talk) 15:00, 18 March 2010 (UTC)
Clarification & comments
I'm doing another full copy edit of this article before it goes to WP:PR. I need some points clarified.
- The school was set up in 1960 by the then Government of Pakistan (Bangladesh was part of Pakistan until 1971), as a special type of institution - only one of its category in Bangladesh... - What is this category? This sentence structure is not correct. I need to know about the category before I can restructure the sentence.
- It has its own rules of business where the Board of Governors has been empowered to “frame rules as it deems necessary for the proper functioning of the school." - What does "rules of business" mean? Should it be "own operating procedures"?
Other Notes:
- I don't have time at the moment to check for consistency. Sometimes the grades are in roman numerals, and sometimes not. Decide which to use and stick to it throughout.
Some picture captions have periods and some don't. Do one or the other.Done.
-- S Masters (talk) 18:33, 18 March 2010 (UTC)
Reply
- I found the information on the school's website. So far as I know, the category is something like a system where the Government plays a significant role in high level decision-making and management related affairs of the school. Locally this category is called Autonomous institution. But that doesn't mean that the school is also wholly funded by the government. Actually the school is funded by both the students and the government, where the govt. aid isn't less important at all. I think it should be better to mention the category as "Autonomous" though I am not sure whether this type of school exists in USA or in any countries of the world.
- Here, the phrase (rules of business) has been used to indicate that process or way it performs or undertake necessary decision. You are not wrong, it's approximately like that. So you can mention "own operating procedure".
- I prefer using words (e.g. third grade, sixth grade etc.), not numerals. If you have enough time, I can do that. Tanweer (talk) 19:17, 18 March 2010 (UTC)